Project 1:
For the personal essay, I first started with describing what the K-pop genre is to the best of my ability. Every term within my essay was described and explained with my own ideas on K-pop. The first draft only included an intro paragraph on what K-pop was, how its popularity grew in the United States, and how it had impacted my life. I soon added a further description of K-pop, specifically the different generations, and how was introduced to the genre in my second draft. My final paper included a full description about K-pop, how it influences others, how it impacts my life, and how it has taught me how to love myself through examples. At the bottom of the personal essay, I included an excerpt from BTS’ UN speech that really resonated with me.
Project 2:
Over the course of writing this paper, many things changed. I wanted to change my first topic, the ethics of Chinese sweatshops, to a more specific topic as the previous one was too broad. Then I wrote my paper to follow the structure: what are sweatshops, are they ethical, Foxconn and Apple’s issues, how they are getting away with it, and why they should not be banned but regulated. However, upon receiving a “What-if” grade, I realized there were a lot of grammatical issues I needed to fix. I then went back to my “finished” essay and fixed my citations, my language, and my generalizations. My citations did not match my bibliography, so I fixed it. My language at times did not fit what I was trying to depict, so I tried to fixed that. Finally, when I was writing, I would write generally and not specifically. Some of the things I was writing seemed to not match what was actually occurring. Overall, I made some grammatical errors that needed to be fixed.
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